matthewhkab
 
When Buck got to Ninja Worrier he talked to the store clerk about the clothing the accident at the banK 
"The person who attacked came here and bought this can you tell me where he went" Buck said 
" I will have to examine the pice so just take a seat " said the store clerk
 When the store clerk came out he said that 
" It belongs to Sing Mi he is very powerful, he told me to not tell his location "
 
"Sir do we have to talk outside!" said buck
"Yes" said the store clerk
"Okay lest talk, Sing Mi just stole my whole bank account so tell me!" said Buck
"Okay okay he is at the ferry heading to china but you wont make it just left" said the store clerk
"Well there is still the plane" said Buck.
Andy
2/24/2010

When Buck got to the Ninja Warrior shop he talked to the store clerk about the clothing.

- What is their conversation? You need more details so we know how the clerk and Buck will interact with each other. The store clerk doesn't know who Buck is, so won't say "not tell his location," because their conversation doesn't let us know this.
- I made some other changes too.


"I will have to examine the piece so just take a seat," said the store clerk.
When the store clerk came out he said, "It belongs to Sing Mi he is very powerful, he told me to not tell his location"
"SIR DO WE NEED TO TALK OUT BACK"said buck
"Yes" said the store clerk
"OKAY LETS TALK, SING MI JUST STOLE MY WHOLE BANK ACCOUNT SO TELL ME!" said Buck
"Okay okay he is at the ferry heading to china but you wont make it just left" said the store clerk
"Well there is still the plane" said Buck.

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Thomas S.
3/11/2010

Warrior is spelled with an A.

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